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I see the needle poised
Ready to burst my rosey cheeked red balloon
I see the needle still
Shaking in the carryers hand
And I fear this hand.

I see the needle arc
Ready to suck used air out
And I see the needle arc

I see my needle fall
And nothing seems to stop the descent
I see my needle maul
My rosy cheeked red ballon
And the string that keeps it from floating
Drops limp accross my hand.
©2002-2009 ~necropsy
:iconnecropsy:

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I guess im happy with this... The name is from a dream I had last night... I guess im afraid of things changing.
Thats all

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:icondeejbard:
just the word, needle. so violent. good poem.


Live. And write. With great haste.
Ray Bradbury
:iconumbilikal:
ick....i hate heedles....just reading this gives me the shivers

The Devil umbilikal http://umbilikal.deviantart.com

~mortified, petrified, stupefied...by you~
:iconsaladin:
I must admit that I also loathe and fear needles. The only problem I would have is with 4th line in the 1st stanza. The repetition of the word 'hand' seems unnecessary and out of place. Nevertheless, nice work!
:icontobie:
Very good use of images and the timing text moves.... niiiiiiiiiice!

Would love to read more of your work.

tobie

Learn to love
and live to love
and learn to love living
:iconintrix:
I wouldn't exactly say violent. It left me feeling sad and empty. =( (Sad)

Great relaying of emotion here. As always, your poems never cease to amaze me and make me feel.

:iconintrix:
They really need a "love deviation" option.

:iconklf:
I agree with intrix.
beautiful somber words


:iconpachunka:
Fantastic stuff man..
Love the repetition with the arc thing; sweet stuff..

Pach
:iconoddlyaromatic:
Gustoness, well done.
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